T2+writing

22/6/11

My writing

Kobey and lila

“Hay Kobey” says lila get out of the dairy you egg or else you will get squashed. Lila grabs his hand just as soon as the dairy collapses. “you are so lucky that you have me as a sister” Says lila. “yeah I guess” Says Kobey












 * __Monday 20th June__**


 * __WALT - identify personifications and use them in our writing__**

S.C. - we can identify the human trait being described we can identify the object being given a human trait we can write our own examples of personification we can explain why this helps to create a picture in our mind


 * 1) The wind whispered through the dark and gloomy forest.

What is being personified? The Wind

Which human trait or quality is given? Whispered


 * 1) The gardener lovingly added the manure to his crops believing he was making happy flowers.

What is being personified? Gardener

Which human trait or quality is given? Happy flowers


 * 1) As we walked through the scorching desert, the sun beat down on us.

What is being personified? Sun

Which human trait or quality is given? The sun can’t beat down on us


 * 1) Time crawled as Tim sat in the hot detention room painfully watching the clock tic.

What is being personified? Time

Which human trait or quality is given? Crawled


 * 1) The lumberjack leveled the many trees into a clearing and his chainsaw sang its deadly song.

What is being personified? Chainsaw

Which human trait or quality is given? Sang its deadly song


 * 1) When Monica walked through the shoe store, each shiny pair of high heels called out to her

What is being personified? high heels

Which human trait or quality is given? They can’t call out to her


 * 1) When the patriots defeated the redcoat army, freedom rang across the fruited plains.

What is being personified? Freedom

Which human trait or quality is given? They can’t rang across


 * 1) As Alice searched for her missing pencil, she said sarcastically, “Well, I guess it just walked off of my desk.” She looked at her classmates accusingly.

What is being personified?

Which human trait or quality is given?

9. Kelly was so happy that Tom and she were moving in together, but when she walked into her new residence, she dropped her suitcase. She had never seen the inside of the house which Tom’s grandmother had given them, and though she was grateful to receive such a nice gift, the ugly yellow wallpaper in the kitchen screamed at her. She knew she would have a lot of work to do to make her new house livable.

What is being personified?

Which human trait or quality is given?


 * 1) William knew that he shouldn’t have eaten the last cookie out of the cookie jar. He knew that his father loved to eat chocolate chip cookies after work, but William ate the last one anyway. Now as he waited for his father to come home, guilt poked and chewed at William. As delicious as the cookie was, William now wished that he had never opened that cookie jar.

What is being personified?

Which human trait or quality is given?

8.6.11

//Metaphors// are a way to compare to by saying that one thing is another thing. For example, we say somebody is a //fool//. In the past in Europe, a fool was a person who entertained the king or queen by doing silly things. The fool was a kind of clown. He often did crazy or stupid things to make people laugh. So when we call somebody a fool we really mean that he or she is doing something silly or stupid. We don’t really mean that they are somebody who entertains the king or queen. We are using a metaphor. What do we mean when we say these things:

When we //say someone is a pig// we really mean that You are ugly.x

When we //call someone an angel// we really mean that You are the love of there world.√

If we //say someone is a giant// we really mean that You are tall√

When //we call a man an ogre or a woman a witch// we really mean They arnt that nice√

When somebody plays cards and //we call them a shark//, we really mean that They are really good at cards√

If we say that //somebody is a volcano ready to explode//, we really mean that They have mental problems or they are angry√

When we say somebody is //bright// we mean that They are smart√

Metaphors are imaginative ways to describe something by comparing that thing to something else. For example, if I wanted to say that Dan is tall, I could say that //Dan is a giant//. Use a metaphor to describe somebody who is:

tall Levi is a rimu tree√ kind Korban is like my grandma√ fast Peni is like a cheetar√ slow Quinn is like a snail√ smart Sam is like a computer√ fat I am like a rhino √ sneaky Ruben is like a eel√ angry Tyce is like a volcano√ beautiful Hamish is like a flower√ ugly Jono is like a dead bee√ stubborn My mum is like a camera man√ short Dave is like a ant√ thin Connor is like a Twig√ silly My brother is like a monkey√ scared Collin is like a hedgehog√ easily You can get scared easily√ He is a giant My mum√ She is an angel My gran√

Pattern 1: like Pattern 2: as Examples Examples Similes are a way to compare two things using ‘like’ or ‘as’. For example, if I want to say that somebody //swims well//, I can say they //swim like a fish// because fish swim well. There are two basic patterns that you can use. verb + like + noun

She swims like a fish. Hamish He looks like an ogre. Levi She plays like a pro. Tyce He walks like a duck. Quinn She acts like a fool. Tyce as + adjective + as + noun He is as tall as a giant. Kyle She is as fast as a rocket. Taylah He is as graceful as a swan. Korban She is as sneaky as a fox. Shelby He is as quiet as a mouse. Hamish How could I say that somebody:

runs fast is pretty jumps well is strong