T1+Writing

**Tuesday 5th April 2011**

 **W.A.L.T:** **Write an argument using persuasive language features to convince people to visit the Bay of Plenty.**

**Success Criteria** **My writing contains an introduction, 3 key arguments and a conclusion** **I will state and restate my opinion** **I use a range of language resources and punctuation** **My paragraphs follow the S.E.E structure**

 Why have you not been to the bay of plenty?

 I would think it is because you think that there is nothing fun to do here.You better come here. Because if you go to a shop you will not feel left out like you do in other countries! we have the best places you can visit and on top of all that you will have the best time of your life!

Us bay of pleantyins have a awesome reputation for our beaches I am encouraging you to get of your but get on a plane right away because you are missing out on all the fun I think every one thinks that NEW ZEALAND is the BEST country in the world for the beaches not to mention the bahamas!p.s. don't go there.Where way nicer and better at every thing!

Well do you think you get left out when you go to the air port and you are about 10 or 20 minutes late and they don't make a call over the speaker and your plane takes of without you well that has happened to some people before but it has never happened at the Tauranga Air Port before that is because we are are very patient isn't that A relief.

If you think you had the time of your life in france eating snails and watching a tower well you have planed your holiday way way way wrong if you haven't been to New Zealand before you DIE well you are not so cool we have the best tourist spots and if you leave disappointed well get a refund!Get of your BUTT and get a flight to NEW ZEALAND today.

So I hope you will come to New zealand because we will make you never fell left out we will never leave you behind at the air port and my personal policy is make every body happy and they will treat you the same way hope fully.

You have some great ideas here Sam, but you are a little informal in the way you get them across. Remember this is a formal piece of writing! Great to see you using paragraphs and including an introduction and a conclusion. Just remember to restate your 3 ideas in your conclusion. Well done for acknowledging there are other places people could visit and stating why BOP is the best. You now need to focus on using stronger imperatives to really convince me and try to think of some stronger reasons also. You are making excellent progress with your writing, just stick to the correct structure. Miss Crone :)